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In my essay writing process, I want to keep writing and receiving feedback in a loop.
- I want to generalize and improve the advice I receive during this process.
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Lack of episodes
- Episodes can maximize specificity and make causal relationships more understandable by telling them in chronological order.
- Therefore, they should be used.
- (This is probably what is referred to as “Show, Not Tell”.)
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Too abstract
- This is ultimately what I have been told since my Japanese application essay.
- It’s not just about giving examples.
- Currently, the examples are also abstract and lack specificity.
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Descriptive scenes
- https://twitter.com/Via_Nirone7/status/1466750878426501121?t=YZhWmgOO5l_CYyn3JzyfPg&s=19
- I feel like this is it.
- I’ve started to think that my writing is not novel-like, and it seems to be a weak point.
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Detailed expressions
- I want to understand the points that are being corrected by people like (yutarotanaka601) and be able to correct them myself.
- It seems that “X of Y” is often changed to “Yish X” to make the words more concise and easier to read, and to reduce word count.
- Improving simple word deficiencies
- For example, the English translation of “未踏の領域” (unexplored territory) could be “uncharted territory”.
- I think I can only ask for help with this (blu3mo).
- For example, the English translation of “未踏の領域” (unexplored territory) could be “uncharted territory”.
- Nuances of specific words
- “Becoming excited” can show a change in emotion more than “getting excited”.
- I also feel like I can only ask for help with this (blu3mo).
- “Becoming excited” can show a change in emotion more than “getting excited”.